Monday, 9 November 2009

1st only excerpt: Appearances can be deceptive.

The following is an excerpt from something that I once started writing. I was experimenting with clichés and characters. (By the way, it is the only excerpt! Sad…hope to rectify that and write more)

This is the reworked 'edition' and I like it better than the original. (Great wisdom it is, the reworking-writing rule!) But it still does sound very amateurish, which it is. The good thing is that I'm finally sharing parts of what I wrote/write and reading Nikita's, Ayesha's, Sinha Sir's blogs, I'm inspired to actually be consistent and regular in my writings.

Anyway, here goes:

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Appearances can be deceptive.

But Arcade was every bit his reputation in his manner of speaking and appearance:

His hair was long and unkempt and fell in a deplorable manner all over his forehead. He was tall, very tall. Naturally, he walked with a slight stoop. The drag in his walk seemed almost rehearsed to match his untidy and seemingly neglected self. His jeans were at least two sizes too baggy and he religiously stuck to shirts of black and blue featuring crap (written or otherwise). Yes, people tended to stare.  

And he enjoyed it.

He enjoyed every bit of being and living, sleeping and waking and walking as Arcade. Nothing amused him more than the reaction he effortlessly got out of the 'higher class' crowd. Mothers would frown and glare at him till he was out of their sight. Girls would 'tut' and sigh, or have their eyes glued to the back of his head until he felt his scalp tickle. Young boys always followed him around for a bit, keeping a respectful distance. Most of them were intimidated by him but awed all the same.

It was not that he looked so outlandish. It was the air around him that seemed to shimmer with his presence. It was obvious by the expensive shoes he wore and the player clipped onto his belt that he wasn't from a poor background. Far from it, he exuded a sense of princely-richness.

Maybe this was what angered the men and women even more: a rich kid purposefully dressed like filth.

And, boy did he revel in it.


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3 comments:

ME said...

Arcade's hot. I like Arcade. Introduce.

You are very innavative with the description: not just because you have managed to make him sound different from all the characters we know but because of the way you have put to words all these distinguishing characteristics!

Continue the series! We want more Arcade!

TeNsEiGa To Me said...

wow, thank you! like, really! definitely more arcade coming up!

Ayesha said...

I love Arcade.. You've decribed him so vividly that it isn't at all hard to build a picture of him in my head.
I second Nikita.
I need more Arcade.